CK Lynn

I thought about putting it in lyrics, but I wrote it as a poem, so I put it here.

funny

P.S. I fixed that misplaced question mark.

I really liked the first one. I think these are really generic, though, try next time taking a picture from an unusual angle or something to make it unique.

Ilke the idea. But seriously, you make this girl seem like a saint thrown into a pit of demons. Is everyone in this girl's life evil to her, or is ...

Very cool! The eyes were off, though.

I don't want the phone to ring again, I don't want to hear you knocking on my door, No more notes taped to my desk, I just can't take them ...

Divided last line, due to crits.

Try breaking up the lines.

I really liked it!

The first one was my favorite. Definetly.

Wow! I really liked them! The first two were my favorites.

I'd like it to be longer. Discribe the little girl more. What does she look like? Is she alone? Part of a cruel family? Tell more, but take care not ...

I really like it. And surprise! This is one of the few poem I've seen where the rhyming works and doesn't sound forced or kiddish (dog, hog for example.) The ...

This is really generic. It kinda has the same "Tide is High" vibe. Try to make it more original.